Sunday, February 13, 2011

Blog Post 2: Application Letter

Below are my job advertisement and the application letter:


Junior/Medical Laboratory Technologist Date Posted : 6 Jan 11

JOB DESCRIPTION
You will play a crucial role in the detection, diagnosis and treatment of diseases. Using sophisticated automated equipment and instruments, you will examine and analyze body fluids, tissues and cells, look for bacteria, parasites and other micro-organisms, analyze the chemical content of fluids, match blood for transfusions and test for drug levels in the blood to show how a patient is responding to treatment. You will analyze the results and relay them to physicians in a timely manner in order for them to confirm a diagnosis or to monitor treatment. You are also expected to contribute towards quality improvement in the department and provide guidance to trainees and students.

Depending on the department's needs, you may be assigned to any of the following laboratories:
  • Biochemistry Laboratory;
  • Blood Transfusion Service;
  • Hematology Laboratory;
  • Microbiology Laboratory; or
  • Histopathology Laboratory.
REQUIREMENTS
1. Relevant and recognized degree/diploma (e.g. medical laboratory science, biomedical science, biotechnology). Candidates with local working experience are preferred.
2. No colour blindness.
3. Team player, with good interpersonal and communication skills.
4. Open to working shifts, extended hours, on weekends/public holidays.
5. Passionate about pursuing a career in healthcare, and able to thrive in a fast-paced environment.

Education Level
Degree & Diploma
Job Function
Allied Health
Job Location
Singapore-Tan Tock Seng Hospital
Job Type
Full Time



    29 Prince George’s Park Road,
    Block 10 Level 5 Room A,
    Singapore 118426

    13 February 2010

    Human Resource Department,
    Level 1, Tan Tock Seng Hospital,
    11 Jalan Tan Tock Seng,
    Singapore 308433

    Dear Hiring Professionals,

    I’m very interested to know that there is a fulfilling role in the healthcare industry which I believe my laboratory knowledge and skills can be a contribution to the hospital. Hence, I am writing to express my interest in the position of a Junior/Medical Laboratory Technologist in Tan Tock Seng Hospital, with reference to the Job Vacancies posted on 6 Jan 2011. (http://www.nhg.com.sg/)

    I am expected to graduate in 2013 from the National University of Singapore with a Bachelor of Science Degree, majoring in Life Sciences (Biomedical Sciences). This specialization exposed me to many health sciences courses and the multiple laboratory sessions in the university helped equip me with the knowledge and techniques in using the instruments and handling the experiments. This practical aspect has in turn molded me into a meticulous and analytical person, which enables me to work well in the laboratory.

    Throughout my education years, I have also learnt how to balance studies and co-curricular activities. I participated in various organizing committees such as the Science Orientation Week Committee and the Science Welfare Committee. Being a Vice Director in the latter committee has helped sharpened my leadership skills in the area of decision-making and mobilizing the team to carry out events such as Second Hand Book Sales and Exam Tea. Furthermore, I was also a Cluster Leader in one of the school’s residence. I shouldered the responsibility of promoting clustermates interaction and also ensuring that the facilities are in good conditions. Thus, all these experiences bolstered my ability to be a leader and team player. In addition, I’m juggling my studies and a part time job as a tuition centre administrator since Year 1 in university. I have also acquired soft skills such as interpersonal and communication skills through the interaction with my colleagues and customers.

    I am aware that the healthcare sector is continuously faced with challenges arising from the unpredictability of diseases and the search for the right treatment. I believe my interest in the healthcare industry will enable me to thrive under challenging circumstances so that I can play a part in this fulfilling role to promote the overall welfare of the society.

    I look forward to meeting you to discuss the job position further and to be assessed in person at a time you are convenient. Please feel free to contact me at 94827611 or email me at cvn@hotmail.com. I will also contact you before 16th February to discuss my application.  

    Yours Sincerely,

    Chan Fong Mei
    Enclosed: Resume

    5 comments:

    1. Hi Vee Nee,

      I think you have done well in showing your skills you gained from your experiences in school. I found the language used in the application letter to be professional too.

      I feel that you can improve your 2nd paragraph. Even though it is detailed, I think you might have inserted too much information in one paragraph. You might want to edit it into 2 different paragraphs for different skills gained or experiences.

      Just to be critical, I think "Yours faithfully" or "Yours truly" should be used instead of "Yours sincerely" since the name of the addressee was not known.

      Otherwise, awesome letter Vee Nee. Hope you get the job!

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    2. Hi Vee Nee,

      I find your letter well written and elaborated. I think there are only a few areas which can be improved on.

      I think that the third paragraph can be more concise. For example, it will be better if "In addition, I’m juggling my studies and a part time job as a tuition centre administrator since Year 1 in university. I have also acquired soft skills such as interpersonal and communication skills through the interaction with my colleagues and customers." can be shortened and more concise.

      You may consider placing the qualities which fulfill the company's requirements before other points to keep the reader interested.

      I wish you all the best with your application! :)

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    3. Hey Vee Nee,

      Out of the 4 or 5 application letters I've read so far, yours was the only one to tell the reader that you would be contacting the company to follow up on your application. While I think that's good, would it be better/easier to follow up if you knew who was going to read your letter?

      As Pei Zi has mentioned, I think that your third paragraph is rather lengthy. Perhaps you might want to put the tuition centre part in a paragraph of its own, and expand it a little?

      One other thing I think you could highlight is your willingness to work shifts and other sorts of odd hours as specified in the job ad. Though the fact that you've applied for this job naturally implies it, I think highlighting it might give you an edge over others who didn't do so.

      Still, the letter is effective and conveys your message effectively. Good job! =)

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    4. Hi Vee Nee,

      I like your opening paragraph because it managed to catch my attention to read on. You have also done well to elaborate different aspects of your letter very clearly. Most of the points written are concise and able to keep the reader's interest.

      There are a few points I'd like to highlight to you to make the application letter even better. Firstly I feel it'd be good to mention that you are open to working shifts and extended hours on weekends and holidays because that is one of the requirements they are looking for in hospitals and there's little chance to talk about this in the resume. Another point you can also mention is no colour blindness.

      In addition I also feel that perhaps u can tweak your second last paragraph to talk more in the "you" perspective for your potential employer!

      With that I wish u all the best in your application! :)

      Regards,
      Jeremy

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    5. Hey all who commented :)

      Thanks for your useful suggestions and advices. I will work on my paragraphs.

      Thanks Ihksan for the reminder of using the appropriate term in the closing.

      Thanks Pei Zi and Keefe for pointing out the need to be more concise and organized in my paragraphs.

      Thanks Jeremy for your suggestion to highlight my ability to fulfill the job requirement.

      All the best to all of you in your application! :)

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